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参加隐秘版征文 - 第一次写故事 [复制链接]

发表于 2008-6-3 20:48 |显示全部楼层
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我3年级的儿子写的第一个故事,他希望发表在这里.谢谢!

                                                                                                               
     DRAGON  
     

Chapter 1   The GREAT ESCAPE
One day there was a fierce Dragon. And his name was Dragon. He lived in a far far away island. He felt lonely so he went off to search for his friend Dragonon and his other Friend George the Sea and land Dragon. He Landed on Dragonon’s front door. And knocked Dragonon came out of his house. Dragonon said “hi Dragon.wanna play with George?” “Sure! I was going to say the same thing! What a coincidence!” said Dragon! So they went off to find George the land and sea dragon. They found him and flew off with there strong and tough wings to play fireball. They landed in the woods and started to play. George shot a huge 45 wide ball of fire!! Dragon used his tail and whipped it to Dragonon. But……Dragonon missed!! Dragon, Dragonon and George were surrounded by fire!
   
Luckily George shot a big 67 wide water ball and the wood was no longer surrounded fire. They were surrounded by water.

Chapter 2   A PUNISHMENT
Dragon and his friends were then caught by Empire of Russia. They were sentence to jail for 4 decades and were found guilty of burning the Great Ancient Forest of Russia.
Day one in ancient Animal jail was horrible! At breakfast dragon and his friend had to eat dog food! “Yuk!”Said George and his friends. Dragon saw a big, strong, tough and kind dragon sitting with nobody and feeling sad because everybody except Dragon and his mates. So Dragon went to sit with him following George and Dragonon. They introduced self and became friends. At night Dragon, George, Dragonon and there new friend Dragos made a plan on how to escape the jail that they were in. The next day the whole groups named there group “The Knights of War”.

Chapter 3 THE JAIL ESCAPE AND A NEW ARMY
In the morning at 2:01 am they went through a secret tunnel. It leads them to a mine. Dragon and his 3 friend started to burn the rocks and then at 3:56 am they were out! Flying into there home island, Dragon Island they all meet lots of Dragons and made an Army of women and men Dragons.  The men where soldier and the women where chefs and nurses. The total of the Amy is 100,000,987 Dragons in the Army. The Russian empire wanted to catch those Dragons to put them into jail. So he declared a war!

Chapter 4 THE WAR!!!
All the men and dragons were wearing there armor. The war began!!! Dragon ran and struck the Prince with his sword. Then the prince stabbed Dragon in the chest but….Dragon wasn’t dead!! He stood there and a burst of fire came from his mouth burning The Princes shield!!! Dragon then burst a ball of flame and used his tail to whip it to the prince, the ball of fire melted his shield and he was left no sword and no shield!! There was no way the Prince could survive this!!! And he didn’t. 3 soldiers ran at Dragon but Dragon whipped the 3 soldiers with his long, sharp, spiky tail!! Dragons tail was on fire because when he is in war mode this happens.


Chapter 5 THE DRAGON Separation
Then a Dragon burn the ground into 2 parts!! One is the Russians and one is the dragon’s side. The Russians went to get buckets of water to wash out the fire. But…..
the fire did not burn out!! The Dragon archers shot 500,000 Arrows and killed half of men!! The Russians took a retreat and failed to kill the Dragon Army. DRAGON was then declared the Empire of DRAGON island!!!!! And for millions of years ruled  DRAGON ISLAND.  

THE END

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发表于 2008-6-3 22:55 |显示全部楼层
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最后2分哈.
还好没白条.

参与宝库编辑功臣

发表于 2008-6-3 23:06 |显示全部楼层
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3年纪的小朋友就可以写这么多了吗?我记得我们好像4年级才开始学作文吧?

2008年度奖章获得者

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niubility, 他可以拿到你拿不到那3分。

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晕,我英文还没你儿子好。。。自卑ing。。。。 虽然有IDEA

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原帖由 江上往来人 于 2008-6-3 22:55 发表
最后2分哈.
还好没白条.

MM有心.3Q
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原帖由 spicypig 于 2008-6-3 23:06 发表
3年纪的小朋友就可以写这么多了吗?我记得我们好像4年级才开始学作文吧?

英文比中文好学的原故吧?

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原帖由 gandu 于 2008-6-3 23:08 发表
niubility, 他可以拿到你拿不到那3分。

小少爷说了,你的CHINGLISH不咋滴

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原帖由 ★阳光小帅★ 于 2008-6-3 23:21 发表
晕,我英文还没你儿子好。。。自卑ing。。。。 虽然有IDEA

慢慢来,会好的. 努力啊.

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恩,谢谢鼓励。 顺便帮你帖子 人工置顶下!

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今晚心情很好, 一回家就见到老师对儿子PRESENTATION SKILLS的评语:

Matthew used a lound, clear, expressive voice that showed his great confidence and extensive knowledeg of the topic. He shared really interesting information on a broad range of ideas, including: geography, touism, places to visit. Matthew was able to recount his trip to Tassie also by explaining his photos. All of the elements engaged the teachers and students throughout the presentation.

Congratulations Matthew! I'm pround of you.
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2008年度奖章获得者

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回复 11# 的帖子

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小马非在学校一定拿奖无数。

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哈哈, 小少爷把tassie 当成了 the Empire of DRAGON island ?

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孩子明天见到这么多叔叔阿姨加分,一定很高兴, 谢谢各位!!

替孩子送上他的Presentation表示感谢:

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发表于 2008-6-3 23:58 |显示全部楼层
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原帖由 gandu 于 2008-6-3 23:42 发表
哈哈, 小少爷把tassie 当成了 the Empire of DRAGON island ?

可惜没分了
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公子写得条理清晰也很生动,赞的!
顺便问一句, 小朋友中文咋样呢?比较关系宝宝以后怎么中英兼修啊。

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公子的中文不行,他姐姐的很好。

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小少爷真有出息。

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Hi, I am matthew. Thank you everyone for the points and your attention. I added them all up by heart. Wow, I've got 119! Yay !!!

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