开贴写写ICAS写作及其与NAPLAN的区别——完结：NAPLAN如五百年前的唐僧，ICAS是转世后的

小小白虎

先开贴，督促自己记得要写，别拖拖拖就忘了

让我们一起看看澳洲英语全国标准化统考的作文和一个独立机构出卷领先潮流的世界级别比赛作文的要求有什么区别

小A今年刚参加的ICAS写作（四年级），也是小虎第一次接触ICAS的写作的规则。
考之前毫无准备，考之后不能随便。拿到报告以后看数据说话，和大家分享一下心得。

有朋友在其他帖子里问自己和Medal的差距，我从报告可以推测出四年级写作的最高分应该是《=28/37，如果孩子有28/37的话就肯定能拿牌了

以下内容都是基于三年级NAPLAN写作和四年级ICAS写作的对比，如有质疑，请回帖！

前面几楼是图表，从八楼开始说人话

大家加分不要手软

写作形式对比

各自的细分项

细分项的对比

如何测算最高分

1、Topic vs Idea

2、Narrative Coherence v.s. Cohesion

3、Narrative Structure(11%) v.s. Text structure(8%)

4、Narrative Devices（11%） v.s. Audience（10%）

5、Imag/Fig Lang（7%） v.s. Character and setting（8%）

6、Vocabulary（7%） v.s. Vocabulary（13%）

7、Tense(7%) Sentence Structure（11%） Syntax（7%）v.s. Sentence structure(13%)

8、Punctuation(11%) v.s. Punctuation(10%)

9、Spelling(11%) v.s. Spelling(10%)

小小白虎

从形式上看，低年级的写作就两种：叙事文和议论文。在这点上ICAS和NAPLAN是一致的。
小A三年级NAPLAN考议论文（BAND 6），四年级ICAS写作考叙事文（better than 96%），两种作文都试过水了。
以前基本都依赖于学校教育，课外和家里的辅导都很少，从四年级开始我们有意识地倾向于增加了课外写作方面的内容。
以上结果我还是比较满意，能体现他的真实能力和水平。

ICAS写作比赛的介绍

ICAS Writing是一种非常适合评估学生的写作技巧的英语测试。 这种基于技能的评估可以让教师清楚地了解学生写作能力的优缺点。 随着时间的推移，每年不断有学生参与，这个写作比赛为个别学生的学习进度和学校提供了宝贵的见解，因为他们比较了当年学生与前几年的表现。

ICAS Writing评估学生对命题作文（或限定内容作文）的扩展响应的能力。 两种形式的写作，叙事文和议论文，在交替的年份进行评估。

ICAS Writing is an English language writing test perfect for assessing a student’s writing skills. This skills-based assessment gives teachers a clear indication of the strengths and weaknesses in their students’ writing ability. With annual participation, over time this writing competition provides valuable insights for both the individual student as they progress in their studies, and schools as they compare the performance of students in the current year against previous years.

ICAS Writing assesses students’ ability to write an extended response to a given task. Two forms of writing, narrative and persuasive, are assessed in alternating years.

NAPLAN写作

澳大利亚课程：英语方面要求学生在学校学习各种形式的写作。 教授的三种主要文本类型包括是富有想象力的写作（包括叙事写作），信息性写作和议论文写作。 在写作测试中，向学生提供“写作刺激元素”（有时称为提示 - 一个想法或主题），并要求他们以特定的文本类型编写回复。 迄今为止，学生已经过测试的文本类型是叙事性写作和说服性写作。 NAPLAN尚未测试信息性写作。

The Australian Curriculum: English requires students to be taught a variety of forms of writing at school. The three main text types (previously called genres) that are taught are imaginative writing (including narrative writing), informative writing and persuasive writing. In the writing tests, students are provided with a ‘writing stimulus’ (sometimes called a prompt – an idea or topic) and asked to write a response in a particular text type. To date the text types that students have been tested on are narrative writing and persuasive writing. Informative writing is not yet tested by NAPLAN.

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athenezhang

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小小白虎

以前写过NAPLAN八股文简介，这里再贴一下细分及占比

http://www.oursteps.com.au/bbs/forum.php?mod=viewthread&tid=1351000&page=1#pid29805178

NAPLAN三年级

Audience	The writer’s capacity to orient, engage and affect the reader	10%
	总结一下就是作品对读者的吸引力和影响力
Text structure	The organisation of narrative features including orientation, complication and resolution into an appropriate and effective text structure	8%
	文章基本架构——所谓的八股
Ideas	The creation, selection and crafting of ideas for a narrative	13%
	叙事创作，选择和创作思想
Character and setting	Character: The portrayal and development of character	8%
	Setting: The development of a sense of place, time and atmosphere
	角色设定
Vocabulary	The range and precision of contextually appropriate language choices	13%
	作者的词汇及运用
Cohesion	The control of multiple threads and relationships across the text, achieved through the use of grammatical elements (referring words, text connectives, conjunctions) and lexical elements (substitutions, repetitions, word associations)	8%
	连词，代词，引用，省略号等的运用——文章是否流畅
Paragraphing	The segmenting of text into paragraphs that assists the reader to negotiate the narrative	6%
	文章的起承转合，段落安排
Sentence structure	The production of grammatically correct, structurally sound and meaningful sentences	13%
	语法和句子的运用是否准确
Punctuation	The use of correct and appropriate punctuation to aid the reading of the text	10%
	标点符号是否准确
Spelling	The accuracy of spelling and the difficulty of the words used	10%
	单词的难度，以及拼写是否准确

ICAS四年级

	Criterion Number	Score Point	Criterion Description	Score Point Description	AU% Achieved	%
Genre	1	1	Topic	The writing included the selection of both setting and object.	89	11%
	1	2	Topic	The salient qualities of one of the selections is integrated into the narrative.	68
	1	3	Topic	The salient qualities of both selections are integrated into the narrative.	6
	2	1	Narrative Coherence	The writing did not maintain coherence in parts.	99	7%
	2	2	Narrative Coherence	The writing maintained coherence.	67
	3	1	Narrative Structure	The writing was a simple narrative which included an event.	100	11%
	3	2	Narrative Structure	The narrative was deliberately structured to create a complication.	50
	3	3	Narrative Structure	The narrative developed the complication by integrating some structural elements.	1
	4	1	Narrative Devices	At least one narrative device (e.g. humour, sensory detail, narrative voice) was attempted.	84	11%
	4	2	Narrative Devices	At least one narrative device (e.g. humour, sensory detail, narrative voice) was used effectively.	26
	4	3	Narrative Devices	Several narrative devices (e.g. humour, sensory detail, narrative voice) were used to engage the reader.	1
	5	1	Imag/Fig Lang	A simple image was built or figurative language (e.g. simile, metaphor) was attempted.	44	7%
	5	2	Imag/Fig Lang	An effective image or an effective example of figurative language (e.g. simile, metaphor) was used.	6
	6	1	Vocabulary	Appropriate vocabulary was used to support the narrative.	81	7%
	6	2	Vocabulary	Some effective vocabulary was used to enhance the narrative.	17
Textual Grammar	7	1	Tense	Tense was maintained consistently and appropriately on almost all occasions.	97	7%
	7	2	Tense	Tense was maintained consistently and appropriately on all occasions.	64
	8	1	Sentence Structure	Most sentences were structured correctly.	84	11%
	8	2	Sentence Structure	Nearly all sentences, including some for narrative effect, were structured correctly.	43
	8	3	Sentence Structure	Nearly all sentences, including some complex types for narrative effect, were structured correctly.	2
Syntax / Punctuation	9	1	Syntax	Syntax (grammar within sentences) was used correctly on almost all occasions.	97	7%
	9	2	Syntax	Syntax (grammar within sentences) was correct on all occasions.	43
	10	1	Punctuation	Full stops and capital letters were used to indicate almost all sentence boundaries.	93	11%
	10	2	Punctuation	All sentence boundaries were indicated and nearly all simple punctuation was used correctly.	51
	10	3	Punctuation	Nearly all simple and nearly all complex punctuation were used correctly.	10
Spelling	11	1	Spelling	Nearly all high frequency words with common letter patterns were spelt correctly.	100	11%
	11	2	Spelling	Nearly all words with less common letter patterns were spelt correctly.	96
	11	3	Spelling	Nearly all words with unusual letter patterns were spelt correctly.	3

小小白虎

横向比较

ICAS			NAPLAN
Genre	Topic	11%	Ideas	13%
	Narrative Coherence	7%	Cohesion	8%
	Narrative Structure	11%	Text structure	8%
	Narrative Devices	11%	Audience	10%
	Imag/Fig Lang	7%	Character and setting	8%
	Vocabulary	7%	Vocabulary	13%
Textual Grammar	Tense	7%	Sentence structure	13%
	Sentence Structure	11%
Syntax / Punctuation	Syntax	7%
	Punctuation	11%	Punctuation	10%
Spelling	Spelling	11%	Spelling	10%
			Paragraphing	6%

小小白虎

以上都是图表，大家懂得自然懂，看不太懂的也没关系，现在楼主开始说人话

对比了NAPLAN和ICAS叙事文的要求后，可以看出要求大体相同，侧重略有不同

先来看看相同的几项里面的细微差别，我只有NAPLAN三年级议论文的详细要求数据，大家将就一点看吧...

1.Topic（11%） v.s. Ideas（13%）

ICAS的切题澳洲的四年级小朋友能达到的点数
The writing included the selection of both setting and object.（89%）
写作包括含了作者选择的设置和对象。
The salient qualities of one of the selections is integrated into the narrative.（68%）
其中一个选择的显着特质被整合到叙述中。
The salient qualities of both selections are integrated into the narrative.（6%）
两种选择的显着特质都融入叙事中。
是否有第四档，第四档内容为何，因为无人达成，所以报告上都省了。很是可恨...

NAPLAN的切题澳洲三年级小朋友能达到的要求
Response is brief and ideas are basic(99%)
回复简短，想法很基本
Very few simple unrelated ideas(99%)
出现很少的无关简单想法
Limited elaboration of ideas(93%)
基本程度的切题构思
Some development/elaboration of ideas(44%)
一定程度的精巧切题构思
Substantial elaboration of ideas(0%)
充分的切题
Selects ideas to explore a theme(0%)
构思体现了对探索主题的理解

以审题为例，小A达到了第一档，没有达到第二档（68%都达到了，不知道小A想啥呢么？），积一分（参照第六楼Score Point）

Thisismavis

小小白虎 发表于 2018-8-27 17:13
以上都是图表，大家懂得自然懂，看不太懂的也没关系，现在楼主开始说人话

对比了NAPLAN和ICAS叙事文的要 ...

请教 你文中 的"四年级最高分小于等于28/37 "

这一项从何而知?

Ningkam527

Thisismavis 发表于 2018-8-27 17:31
你文中 的"四年级最高分小于等于28/37 "

这一项从何而知?

同問！

小小白虎

Thisismavis 发表于 2018-8-27 17:31
你文中 的"四年级最高分小于等于28/37 "

这一项从何而知?

我就是为了回答你在另外一个帖子里的问题的
可惜我看不到五年级的报告，不然可以告诉你五年级的最高分了，其实也很简单，我本来打算最后写的，既然你问了，我现在就写。无论如何你家孩子HD是top 1%，非常棒！恭喜了！

拿以下报告举例，可以看到Criterion Number 11（第二列最后一项）是Spelling

以下是小A的报告拼写部分2 out of 4，我从此可以知道spelling一共有四档分数



其中

Score Point 1（第三列）有100%（第六列）达到

Score Point 2有96%达到

Score Point 3有3%达

Score Point 4有0%达到

所以spelling的最高分是3 out of 4，


以此同理，把每个Criterion Number 孩子们能达到的最高分加起来（见以下加粗高亮数据）得出28 out of 37，这是理论上的最高分，就是说可能有这么几个孩子把所有的项目都达到了。
实际最高分可能等于或小于28 out of 37

	Criterion Number	Score Point	Criterion Description	Score Point Description	AU% Achieved
Genre	1	1	Topic	The writing included the selection of both setting and object.	89
	1	2	Topic	The salient qualities of one of the selections is integrated into the narrative.	68
	1	3	Topic	The salient qualities of both selections are integrated into the narrative.	6
	2	1	Narrative Coherence	The writing did not maintain coherence in parts.	99
	2	2	Narrative Coherence	The writing maintained coherence.	67
	3	1	Narrative Structure	The writing was a simple narrative which included an event.	100
	3	2	Narrative Structure	The narrative was deliberately structured to create a complication.	50
	3	3	Narrative Structure	The narrative developed the complication by integrating some structural elements.	1
	4	1	Narrative Devices	At least one narrative device (e.g. humour, sensory detail, narrative voice) was attempted.	84
	4	2	Narrative Devices	At least one narrative device (e.g. humour, sensory detail, narrative voice) was used effectively.	26
	4	3	Narrative Devices	Several narrative devices (e.g. humour, sensory detail, narrative voice) were used to engage the reader.	1
	5	1	Imag/Fig Lang	A simple image was built or figurative language (e.g. simile, metaphor) was attempted.	44
	5	2	Imag/Fig Lang	An effective image or an effective example of figurative language (e.g. simile, metaphor) was used.	6
	6	1	Vocabulary	Appropriate vocabulary was used to support the narrative.	81
	6	2	Vocabulary	Some effective vocabulary was used to enhance the narrative.	17
Textual Grammar	7	1	Tense	Tense was maintained consistently and appropriately on almost all occasions.	97
	7	2	Tense	Tense was maintained consistently and appropriately on all occasions.	64
	8	1	Sentence Structure	Most sentences were structured correctly.	84
	8	2	Sentence Structure	Nearly all sentences, including some for narrative effect, were structured correctly.	43
	8	3	Sentence Structure	Nearly all sentences, including some complex types for narrative effect, were structured correctly.	2
Syntax / Punctuation	9	1	Syntax	Syntax (grammar within sentences) was used correctly on almost all occasions.	97
	9	2	Syntax	Syntax (grammar within sentences) was correct on all occasions.	43
	10	1	Punctuation	Full stops and capital letters were used to indicate almost all sentence boundaries.	93
	10	2	Punctuation	All sentence boundaries were indicated and nearly all simple punctuation was used correctly.	51
	10	3	Punctuation	Nearly all simple and nearly all complex punctuation were used correctly.	10
Spelling	11	1	Spelling	Nearly all high frequency words with common letter patterns were spelt correctly.	100
	11	2	Spelling	Nearly all words with less common letter patterns were spelt correctly.	96
	11	3	Spelling	Nearly all words with unusual letter patterns were spelt correctly.	3

封神的小胖

小小白虎 发表于 2018-8-27 17:49
我就是为了回答你在另外一个帖子里的问题的
可惜我看不到五年级的报告，不然可以告诉你五年级的最 ...

虎妈你这逻辑是错误的，0%并不是真的一个人都没有，4舍掉了，类似情况可参考AMC的年报，某些题正确率显示0，但还是会有人做对。

小小白虎

封神的小胖 发表于 2018-8-27 18:00
虎妈你这逻辑是错误的，0%并不是真的一个人都没有，4舍掉了，类似情况可参考AMC的年报，某些题正确率显示 ...

谢谢分享，我知道历年的NAPLAN显示0%也是有人得到的
不过ICAS是只要有人达到，报告上就应该显示出，不显示（根本就不知道第四项是什么要求）就是没人达到，和0不0已经没关系了。
退一步即使四舍五入了，那么这个数据还是有参考意义的。

还是要谢谢你，希望大家能看到你的回复，然后自行判断。小虎不是权威，以上是个人的观点和算法

最后希望四年级拿写作medal的孩子出来说一下情况，看看我的推测准不准

Thisismavis

小小白虎 发表于 2018-8-27 17:49
我就是为了回答你在另外一个帖子里的问题的
可惜我看不到五年级的报告，不然可以告诉你五年级的最高 ...

非常感谢。这么算的话 那五年级最高分是30/37。 如果错了，欢迎指正。 我们是28/37,GENRE 里掉了这两分。

小小白虎

Thisismavis 发表于 2018-8-27 18:13
非常感谢。这么算的话 那五年级最高分是30/37。 如果错了，欢迎指正。 我们是28/37,GENRE 里掉了这两分。 ...

你们作文的内容是啥，我们是选一组场景（小河边、露营地、图书馆、铁轨边），选一组物件（一束花、一辆脚踏车、一件外套），然后写故事，四五年级是一样的题目么？

即使不到medal也是很接近了，你家小朋友很棒！

我们是四年级21 out of 37，better than 96%，差距还是蛮大的
不过写作本不是小A的强项，我已经非常满意了。

小小白虎

2.  Narrative Coherence（7%） v.s. Cohesion（8%）
ICAS注重文章总体的流畅程度（但没有具体要求使用连词，代词，引用，省略号等）
NAPLAN注重是否孩子是否通过使用语法元素和词汇元素（连词，代词，引用，省略号等），把文章各部分串起来，让文章流畅，读起来顺口。

这部分我理解ICAS大部分孩子都达到写作的连贯性，而NAPLAN考点更细致，考察对cohesive links的运用，达成率反而不高。

ICAS
The writing did not maintain coherence in parts.(99%)
写作并没有保持部分的连贯性。
The writing maintained coherence.(67%)
写作保持连贯性。

是否有第三档，第三档内容为何，因为无人达成，所以报告上都省了。

NAPLAN
Little evidence of cohesion(99%)
很少的连贯性
Some correct cohesive links(87%)
部分的连贯性
Correct use of cohesive links(4%)
正确使用连词，代词，引用，省略号等连贯文章的方式
Correct/varied cohesive devices used(0%)
正确及多样性的连贯符号使用

Thisismavis

小小白虎 发表于 2018-8-27 18:16
你们作文的内容是啥，我们是选一组场景（小河边、露营地、图书馆、铁轨边），选一组物件（一束花、一辆脚 ...

没想到啊，题目是一样的。我们觉得参加摸摸水就很好。 没有这样的考试，也无从了解啥水平。

小小白虎

Thisismavis 发表于 2018-8-27 18:43
没想到啊，题目是一样的。我们觉得参加摸摸水就很好。 没有这样的考试，也无从了解啥水平。 ...

说明你家孩子基础（词汇，语法，拼写）很好，又有写作天赋（文章的立意，故事性，流畅性）。

Thisismavis

小小白虎 发表于 2018-8-27 19:06
说明你家孩子基础（词汇，语法，拼写）很好，又有写作天赋（文章的立意，故事性，流畅性）。 ...

谢谢，孩子作文我没看到，但是看题目，也觉得挺不好写的，完全是先考想象力，然后才是构造，写作技巧，语法，等等。想想现在的孩子也挺不容易的。

小小翅膀

学习了，感谢楼主无私奉献

Sauyue

白兔

请教没有writing考试科目的学校，可以在什么地方报名考试吗？谢谢

Ningkam527

Thisismavis 发表于 2018-8-27 18:13
非常感谢。这么算的话 那五年级最高分是30/37。 如果错了，欢迎指正。 我们是28/37,GENRE 里掉了这两分。 ...

我家闺女spelling扣一分，另外syntax和genre各扣一分，得27/37。估计你家有可能是medal，如真的就恭喜了！我们第一次，这成绩已满意。

小小白虎

白兔 发表于 2018-8-27 21:08
请教没有writing考试科目的学校，可以在什么地方报名考试吗？谢谢

我们在north shore报名考试的

Thisismavis

Ningkam527 发表于 2018-8-27 21:24
我家闺女spelling扣一分，另外syntax和genre各扣一分，得27/37。估计你家有可能是medal，如真的就恭喜了 ...

谢谢，我们五年级，没有拿MEDAL, 小朋友对于自己相比有进步，我们已经很满意了。

excellentcarol

三年级写作第一次参加20 out of 37, better than 98%. Genre 分数太低，其它各项比满分各少一分

squareliang

excellentcarol 发表于 2018-8-27 22:22
三年级写作第一次参加20 out of 37, better than 98%. Genre 分数太低，其它各项比满分各少一分 ...

我们是17 out of 37，89%，差3分差了这么多啊

bonner

我家的三年级，18/37，better tnan 93%, 这个分数段的人比较多。

zzn

我对于naplan和icas spelling的评分一直有点小意见。如果通篇用常见词，没有拼写错误这项也拿不到满分。为搏满分，必须用点儿“高级”一点的词。是不是有必要呢？记得几个月前也有专家抨击过naplan的这种评分标准。看来icas评分跟naplan也差不多。

youxuan1420

zzn 发表于 2018-8-28 00:38
我对于naplan和icas spelling的评分一直有点小意见。如果通篇用常见词，没有拼写错误这项也拿不到满分。为 ...

不知道茴字的六种写法也好意思说自己是读书人。